PART ONE (STUDENT’S EMAIL) I got out early and wrote my own personal essay. This is 100% my writing, I assume you'll be able to tell through the language. I resubmitted it through blackboard and will also share it with you. Thank your for the second chance. ---- PART TWO (MY FEEDBACK) There is some interesting content here. There are some issues with grammar and structure, focus and specificity, and the ability for the reader to understand some of the connections between one thought and the next. But at least it has some personal opinion, some clear connection to the selected texts, and at least one really awesome turn of phrase: "God's greatest beauty wasn't the people he polluted the earth with...." "...integrity is how you act when no one is watching..." Amen. ---- PART THREE (I’ve just figured it out.) I want the world to be full of more awesome and astonishing and magical writing-- *whether it comes from me or not!* (2017) #pdp